Some people think that fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
I believe that child-rearing（词汇多样）should be the responsibility of both parents and that, while the roles within that partnership may be different （让步条件插入）, they are equal in importance （观点明确）. In some societies, it has been made easier over the years for single parents to raise children on their own （再让步说明单亲关系）. However, （直接转折再强调论点）this does not mean that the traditional family, with both parents providing emotional support and role-models for their children （插入伴随状语）, is not the most satisfactory way of bringing up children. （双否定强调观点，句式多样。整体词汇替换多样）
Of crucial importance（前置强调）, in my opinion（简单插入语丰富句式）, is how we define “responsible for bringing the children up”. At its simplest, it could mean giving the financial support necessary to provide a home, food and clothes and making sure the child is safe and receives an adequate education （连续doing列举说明）. This would be the basic definition.
There is, however （时刻不忘插入语）, another possible way of defining that part of the question. That would be to say that （指代准确）it is not just the fathers’ responsibility to provide the basics for his children, while his wife is busy with the everyday activity of bringing them up. Rather（转折多样）, he should share these daily duties, spend as much time as his job allows with his children, play with them, read to them, help directly with their education, anticipate fully in their lives and encourage them to share his （继续连续举例论证，论述充分）.
It is this second, fuller, concepts of “fatherhood” that I am in favour of（强调句开头，句式多样，搭配准确）, although I also realise how difficult it is to achieve sometimes. Therefore, equality in parenting roles（观点） may remain for many（客观准确） a desirable ideal rather than an achievable reality.（用词多样准确）