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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
构思过程：题目问读私校是否应该交税支持政府发展教育，答案显然是无悬念的一边倒：应该交税！（如果写任何不应该交税的内容估计都会与考官的基本价值观产生严重冲突从而大大降低你的印象分）坚定提出观点后，主体段先反驳不交税，列举不交税有哪些坏处，再说交税有哪些好处，最后重申观点，结构就完整了。
Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools should not need to contribute to state schools through taxes （十分精彩的开篇同义替换，contribute和through体现功力）. Personally, I completely disagree with this view.
For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for families who pay for private education（同义替换多样）. Firstly, it would be difficult to calculate the correct amount of tax reduction for these families, and staff would be required to manage this complex process. Secondly, we all pay a certain amount of tax for public services that we may not use. For example, most people are fortunate enough not to have to call the police or fire brigade at any time in their lives, but they would not expect a tax reduction for this（举例类比，转折强调观点，论证有力）. Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount for sending their children to private schools, we might have a situation where poorer people pay higher taxes than the rich（最后用假设引出第三个分论点，situation+where好用，the rich地道）.
In my opinion, we should all be happy to pay our share of the money that supports public schools（替换state education）. It is beneficial for all members of society to have a high quality education system with equal opportunities for all young people. This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation（无痕迹推理）. Parents of children in private schools may also see the advantages of this in their own lives. For example, a company owner will need well qualified and competent（展现词汇多样）staff, and a well-funded education system（地道） can provide such employees.
In conclusion, I do not believe that any financial concessions（高分搭配替换tax reduction） should be made for people who choose private education.
