In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Taking a year off and travelling around has been popular in many parts of the world. While taking the gap year may help students know themselves and the outside world better, some students may find it is hard to go back to school anymore.（第一段简单朴素，慢慢提升考官兴奋度。同义词替换，简洁，总括全文观点。）

Taking one year off and travelling around deepens students’ understanding about themselves.（主题句提取简洁有力）If students stay on the campus for a long time, it may be difficult for them to know their own personalities and preferences.（假设论证） On the contrary, when traveling or working in the gap year, they will normally perform some real tasks or chores, they may have a better understanding about their own taste. （对比论证）For example, a seemingly introverted girl may find that it is her nature and personality to communicate with people rather than doing some repetitive and boring work.（举例论证）主题句后层次论证，文章内容充实，没有空话，论证充分。没有用任何大词，通顺流畅！

Taking the gap year also allows the school leavers to be familiar with the society and they may accordingly（注意小的副词的运用）choose a more suitable major when they come back to school. During the gap year, students may wander around or take some part-time jobs so they are exposed to the real society. They may come across(灵活运用短语动词) some industry which, they find,（注意如何使用插入语） is very promising and thus（注意thus的用法）they may choose a relevant major.

However, not every student can come back to school. （反方观点）Some of them may forget those theories, equations or principles and find it is extremely difficult to continue their study. Some may find it is embarrassing to return to the classroom because they will be surrounded with students much younger than them. Moreover, some school leavers make a fortune during the gap year so they are reluctant to go back. Even for those unsuccessful, they may not want to waste three or four more years to complete a degree because they need to support themselves and raise their families.

In conclusion, although stopping attending universities immediately after graduation from high school may（用may这种语气不强的词显示你的客观性）contribute to one’s better understanding about themselves and the society as a whole, it may pose a potential danger that some students will never return. It is my personal belief that（很低调的得出自己的结论，不要再用I am fully convinced这种高调绝对的搭配，如果主体段没有说服考官，只会使得考官反感）it should be left with individuals and their families to decide whether or not they should take the gap year.