雅思大作文–大家移民攒分攒的如何了??

去年底有部电影Brooklyn,讲的是美国新移民的生活,最后女主为了爱情放弃了英国富贵的生活,回到了美国。墨尔本文波雅思PTE的小编今天带大家来看一篇考官的9分范文,关于社会生活类雅思写作话题。

More and more people are migrating to cities in search of a better life, but city life can be extremely difficult. Explain some of the difficulties of living in a city. How can governments make urban life better for everyone?

(273 words, band 9)

Cities are often seen as places of opportunity, but there are also some major drawbacks of living in a large metropolis. In my opinion, governments could do much more to improve city life for the average inhabitant.

最简单的两句式开头,一句介绍背景,一句摆明观点。简单明了,直截了当,大家开头千万不要太纠结,赶紧写完,进入主题。

The main problem for anyone who hopes to migrate to a large city is that the cost of living is likely to be much higher than it is in a small town or village. Inhabitants of cities have to pay higher prices for housing, transport, and even food. Another issue is that urban areas tend to suffer from social problems such as high crime and poverty rates in comparison with rural areas. Furthermore, the air quality in cities is often poor, due to pollution from traffic, and the streets and public transport systems are usually overcrowded. As a result, city life can be unhealthy and stressful.

考官此处阐述了三个问题,用了一系列的连接词,文章结构清晰,一目了然。用词上讲究精简,准确,并无大词。

However, there are various steps that governments could take to tackle these problems. Firstly, they could invest money in the building of affordable or social housing to reduce the cost of living. Secondly, politicians have the power to ban vehicles from city centres and promote the use of cleaner public transport, which would help to reduce both air pollution and traffic congestion. In London, for example, the introduction of a congestion charge for drivers has helped to curb the traffic problem. A third option would be to develop provincial towns and rural areas, by moving industry and jobs to those regions, in order to reduce the pressure on major cities.

本段中政府会有三个措施来解决问题, 第一个措施的主语是governments,第二个措施的主语是 politicians,第三个直接就用a third option,对象不一样,句式多变。用词的话还是讲究搭配精准,并无fancy words。

In conclusion, governments could certainly implement a range of measures to enhance the quality of life for all city residents.

结尾简洁明了,整篇文章行文流畅,并无绚丽辞藻,所以小烤鸭们,好好学习语法,句式多变,逻辑强,词汇搭配精准绝对是你取得雅思写作高分的关键。小烤鸭们,加油!有兴趣的同学也欢迎致电咨询我们的词汇语法,雅思写作班。

 

 

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