2015年4月25日雅思大作文解析——不同年龄犯罪,一样惩罚?

2015年4月25号这道雅思写作task2的话题是犯罪类话题,这是雅思常考话题之一,也是墨尔本文波雅思写作班11大类必讲的话题之一,今天墨尔本文波就给大家讲解下,下面开始:

题目:Some people think that  teenagers should be given the same punishment as adult criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

青少年犯罪应该和成人一样对待,你同不同意?

1.审题

2.同义: juvenile delinquent/juvenile delinquency/ youth criminals/ youth crimes/

fixed punishment/ be punished alike/ receive identical punishment/ be penilised in the same way

3. 素材:

+. immature/naive/cannot distinguish right from wrong/it is easy for them to be misled/ go astray—Adults have received sufficient education and they have free will. They are well aware of what they have done. Compared with those hardened criminals who deliberately break the law, it is unfair to give juvenile delinquents the same punishment. For example…The Hero in Les Miserable

+. Teenagers’ life can be totally devastated if they are penalised in the same way as those rational and mature adult criminals. Juvenile delinquents can be educated and converted to someone who can contribute to the well-being of the society. Unlike adults who may be too  old to be changed, young wrongdoers are moldable.

_ some one argue that if teenager criminals get favorable treatment, more juvenile criminals may not feel intimidated… In addition, some adults may take advantage of the loophole and abet some children or teenagers to break the law. For example, many children in China are organised and educated to steal or even rob pedestrians on the street.  中国新疆小孩或者Slumdog Millionaire 里的小孩犯罪团伙。 反驳:We can take other approaches to education the teenager criminals and rehabilitate them. Moreover, giving them the same punishment is not necessarily effective in deterring them from committing crimes.

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