雅思写作另类归纳分类总结 (五)现代化带来的影响

现代社会高速发展,给人们的生活带来了巨大的变化,包括交通便捷,生活质量的提高,通讯技术,先进科技的应用等。在享受现代化带来的快捷高效的生活同时,我们自身也无不受着不良影响的冲击,高科技产生了更多的懒人,大气污染,网络让大多数网民沉溺其中。

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Discuss what advantages and disadvantages brought by modernization?

首段,插入语的大量使用,给文章添彩,另外优缺点的文章需在最后一句话明确说明。

Modernisation has made great progress, in recent decades, and become one of the most important trends for many old cities, worldwide. However, a criticism often levelled these days that the adverse consequences of this renovation, such as cultural erosion, environmental damage and social ills, have plagued the urban community and its people. Therefore, despite it being a strong stimulant to local economy, modernisation clearly gives rise to negative effects. I will discuss both the pros and cons of this social development.

主体段一,现代化的优点,注意同义词汇的替换。举例说明有一定说服力。

Admittedly, being updated to a rejuvenated city, local society and its people benefit greatly in many ways. Most importantly, the economies and financial status of the old regions will grow to become more robust as the number of investment opportunities increase. Incoming millionaires and large companies will promote their new projects and invest huge amounts of money and resources in various fields such as modern shopping malls, multi-functional apartments, theme parks and many other cash-generating facilities. All of these not only lead to a higher revenue for the local community, but, more importantly, provide local people with a more comfortable and convenient lifestyle. For example, in a shopping mall, people get to shop from clothes to foods and household items, they can choose to spend time either in a classic restaurant or a fancy movie theatre, or have a drink in a newly refurbished bar. Moreover, such a development can help decrease the unemployment rate as flourishing constructions require more human capital to cope with the demand.

主体段二,这段里有很多对现代化描述的好的搭配可以借鉴,句型多变。

However, local communities may suffer badly from the rapid development. Sites of ancient architectures would be converted into roads and modern skyscrapers. While the landscape of cities would wear facade of a concrete jungle, this would be devastating to the traditional ways of living. What is even worse, it leaves people with nowhere to remember and cherish the value of local history and culture. In addition, with entertaining complexes, such as casinos, strip clubs and bars, undesirable influences would envelop modernised districts. It is no wonder that Las Vegas records a skyrocketing figure of gamblers, drunkards and nocturnal individuals.

结尾段,可以用while这句简单的话总结说明。

In conclusion, while modern development can yield high financial profits, it also produces harmful cultural erosion and social woes.

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