在最近的雅思写作考试中，与社会生活相关的抽象类话题已经晋升为仅次于教育类的热门考点，也是复习准备的难点。今天墨尔本文波雅思为大家逐句解析一篇最新考官自写的9分范文，内容是关于独居好处和坏处的讨论，清晰展现构思过程及每个评分标准的拿分点。
In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
构思过程：
独居，也就是一个人生活，显然有利有弊，如果选择一边倒观点显然都站不住脚，很难论证，需要分开讨论平均用力。主体段一段写好处，一段写坏处。抽象类话题往往在寻找观点上比较困难或者没有方向，建议大家按照文波雅思教授的方法分类提取观点。本篇考官分别从个人和经济的角度出发，层次分明论证清晰，值得大家学习。
Introduction
1）背景导入，说尤其在发达国家的大城市，最近几年独居变得更为常见。
In recent years it has become far more normal for people to live alone, particularly in large cities in the developed world.
（句型结构：It + adj. + for sb. to do sth. + 后置状语补充，注意完成时has become；注意particularly的用法，举特例方便直接，类似especially但语气更强； in the developed world比in developed countries更地道；far more修饰normal代入感强）
2）观点句，我认为这个趋势的影响好坏各半。
In my opinion, this trend could have both positive and negative consequences in equal measure.
（句型结构：简单句+后置状语；虚拟语气could have；consequences高分词；in equal measure高分搭配）
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1）段首概括，一个人住在个人和宏观经济上都有好处。
The rise in one-person households can be seen as positive for both personal and broader economic reasons.
（句型结构：被动+后置状语并列；主语the rise in one-person households替换more people choose to live alone，地道高分搭配准确；seen as语法得分点；personal & broader economic词汇得分点）
2）分论点1：个人层面上，独居的人可能变得比和家人一起住的人更独立自强（常见观点）
On an individual level, people who choose to live alone may become more independent and self-reliant than those who live with family members.
（句型结构：前置状语+主语who从句+谓语比较级+宾语who从句，高分复合句；self-reliant高分词，展示词汇量）
3）举例论证+线性推理展开：独居年轻人需要学做饭，做家务，付账单，管账等重要的生活技能；这样的人增加了就是种正面的发展
A young adult who lives alone, for example, will need to learn to cook, clean, pay bills and manage his or her budget, all of which are valuable life skills; an increase in the number of such individuals can certainly be seen as a positive development.
（句型结构：主语从句+插入语+不定式并列+宾语all of which从句；简单分句+被动；valuable得分词；an increase语法得分点；such individuals指代准确，语法和词汇得分点）
4）分论点2：经济角度上看，独居的趋势会导致住房需求增加（加分观点）
From an economic perspective, the trend towards living alone will result in greater demand for housing.
（句型结构：前置状语+后置定语+简单句；trend towards living搭配准确，词汇和语法得分点；result in学术搭配，词汇得分点；demand for housing词汇得分点）
5) 举例说明展开：这样会让建筑公司，房产中介和其它依赖业主购买产品的公司获益。
This is likely to benefit the construction industry, estate agents and a whole host of other companies that rely on homeowners to buy their products or services.
（句型结构：简单句+宾语并列+宾语that从句；likely to benefit学术搭配，词汇得分点；construction industry & estate agents展示词汇量；rely on homeowners词汇得分点）
Main Paragraph 2
1）段首概括：上述个人和经济的论点可以反向考虑；（简介易懂，挂钩前文暗含对比，CC满分技巧）
However, the personal and economic arguments given above can be considered from the opposite angle.
（句型结构：转折+简单句被动；given above非谓语修饰，语法得分点；be considered from学术搭配，词汇语法得分点；the opposite angle词汇得分点）
2）分论点1：和独立的好处相比，独居的人会感觉孤独、隔离和不安（常见观点）
Firstly, rather than the positive feeling of increased independence, people who live alone may experience feelings of loneliness, isolation and worry.
（句型结构：前置状语+主语从句+宾语并列；rather than无痕迹对比，语法和CC得分点；loneliness & isolation高分词）
3）举例对比+论证展开：他们错过了家人或室友提供的对话和支持，还要承担过重的家庭账单和职责；这样来说，这个趋势就是负面的
They miss out on the emotional support and daily conversation that family or flatmates can provide, and they must bear the weight of all household bills and responsibilities; in this sense, perhaps the trend towards living alone is a negative one.
（句型结构：简单句并列+宾语从句+简单分句；miss out on地道搭配；emotional support, daily conversation & flatmates词汇加分点；bear the weight of高分搭配，词汇得分点；a negative one指代准确避免重复，语法得分点）
4）分论点2：从经济角度来说，住房需求增加会推高房价和租金（加分观点）
Secondly, from the financial point of view, a rise in demand for housing is likely to push up property prices and rents.
（句式结构:前置状语+简单句；the financial point of view替换an economic perspective；likely to push up学术搭配；property prices & rents词汇得分点）
5）对比论证+说明展开：虽然让企业获益，但大众包括独居的人都要面临更高的居住成本
While this may benefit some businesses, the general population, including those who live alone, will be faced with rising living costs.
(句式结构：让步句+插入语补充+被动；be faced with地道搭配；rising living costs词汇得分点)
Conclusion
1）一句话总结：独居增加对个人和经济影响有好有坏
In conclusion, the increase in one-person households will have both beneficial and detrimental effects on individuals and on the economy.
（句式结构：总结+简单句+宾补；detrimental不利的，高分词，beneficial & detrimental替换positive & negative；两个on介词短语并列，语法得分点）
TR: 两面观点完整回答问题，分论点详实有深度，首尾段观点总结到位，9分
CC: 全篇结构清晰，整齐，行文连接通顺，易于理解，没有明显模板痕迹，9分
LR: 词汇非常多样，同义替换到位，搭配地道准确，9分
GA: 句型多变，复合句实用灵活，没有语法错误，9分
(13 sentences, 306 words, band 9)
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