雅思写作高分范文及解析-教育类-knowledge vs work

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Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think tat the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?

 

构思过程:

题目问大学的主要职能是培养就业才能还是教授理论知识,很明显两个都不能缺,先承认就业压力下培养工作技巧是有必要的,再说没有理论教学是不行的,两边的用处都要说明白,最后总结说二者相结合即可。

 

第一段 Introduction 由就业问题引出学生期待大学培养工作技能

In the midst of financial turmoil and massive layoffs (“在经融危机和大规模失业的环境中”,高分词汇多样), it is understandable that the majority of university students think of their future job security as a pressing priority (“当务之急”,用词准确多样). Accordingly, (无痕迹表达因果关系)they tend to regard universities primarily as institutions where employment skills can be acquired (学术词汇和从句表达准确,无任何中式英文痕迹).

 

第二段 由花费和回报率推理出学校应该教学生掌握就业技能

This is especially true when we consider the fact that the cost of tuition and fees has been rising each year, which means too many, pursuing higher education (同义替换)is very much like making a substantial investment (“大量的”,高分词汇). Thus, university students and their parents alike (“类似地”,无痕迹表达)tend to expect reasonable rates of return that can be, to some degree, (插入语,表客观)quantified by the job skills students possess. (句式结构复杂多样,用词搭配准确quantify rate of return/possess job skills)

 

第三段 大学为什么不能只教工作技能的两个原因

Still, (无痕迹转折)I wish to point out that merely equipping students with employment skills may defeat (词汇多样)the very purpose of (“特有的用途”)universities as educational institutions. Realistically, (现实角度展开) it would be very hard for university administrators and faculty to determine what technical skills and knowledge will be needed three or four years from now as (无痕迹因果)the technology in many areas is updating itself on a daily basis. What will also be at risk is the students’ capacity to innovate because true innovations require thorough understanding of fundamental theories (词汇多样搭配准确,观点有说服力)in the related fields rather than (无痕迹对比)the ability to apply these theories in the workplace, which is exactly how we define the employment skill (补充说明逻辑关系紧密论证充分).

 

第四段 总结两方面

The main function of universities, therefore, (插入语连接上下文)should be building core curricula that stress the fostering of employment skills (高分词汇同义替换)while at the same time, (无痕迹引出另一方面)providing students with electives on the theoretical aspects of their fields of interest, (搭配准确)which not only facilitates their grasp of job skills but ensures their capacity to apply these skills innovatively as well. (从句无痕迹概括了前两段论证,句式多样,论点推进连贯通顺)

 

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