雅思写作7分范文–四项评分标准详细解析

昨天给大家分享了一篇7分范文,今天,墨尔本文波雅思就这篇范文给出解析,让大家了解雅思写作是如何评分的,如何在写作中达到7分。

范文地址:http://wenbo.tv/ielts-writing-social/

Task Response

写作任务回应情况

The writer shows that he/she understands the question. A clear position is presented throughout the response.

考生表现出对题目的理解,并在整个写作过程中呈现了一个清晰的立场。

Coherence & Cohesion

连贯与衔接

Ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the writing. The writer commences with a full introduction and brief position, going on to justify this position in two self-contained paragraphs with clear central topics before finishing with a clear conclusion.

观点组织很有逻辑,全文的行文发展都很清晰。考生以全面的介绍与简要的立场开篇,继而在两个独立的段落中对这一立场做出解释,中心思想明确,最后以清晰的结论结尾。

Substitution and referencing could be more sophisticated throughout.

替换和指代可以更精确。

  • “would like the learn and improve …”
  • “ … on the way to the adulthood …”

Lexical Resource

词汇丰富程度

Despite occasional errors in word choice, such as “when the children are at their ages” and “high coincidence”, there is a sufficient range of vocabulary for precision and flexibility, for instance:

虽然词语选择偶尔出现错误——例如“when the children are at their ages”“high coincidence”,但文中使用了丰富的词汇,词汇的使用准确而灵活,例如:

  • “… negative relationship with the socio-economic situation of the family.”
  • “… parenting style and individual’s own efforts …”
  • “… positive attitude towards harsh realities …”
  • “… child’s capacity building.”
  • “… poverty-stricken family …”

Grammatical Range & Accuracy

语法多样性及准确性

There are a variety of complex structures. A few grammatical errors persist but these do not hinder understanding.

文中使用了多样的复杂句型。一些语法错误多次出现但并不影响理解。

  • “… it is very vital and necessary for them to develop the positive attitude towards harsh realities as well as strategies to deal with problems under the proper guidance of parents.”
  • “When the children encounter various problems, it is important for them to acquire appropriate knowledge and techniques to analyze the problems…”

Overall score: 7

总分:7

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