The writer shows that he/she understands the question. A clear position is presented throughout the response.
Coherence & Cohesion
Ideas are logically organised and there is a clear progression throughout the writing. The writer commences with a full introduction and brief position, going on to justify this position in two self-contained paragraphs with clear central topics before finishing with a clear conclusion.
Substitution and referencing could be more sophisticated throughout.
- “would like the learn and improve …”
- “ … on the way to the adulthood …”
Despite occasional errors in word choice, such as “when the children are at their ages” and “high coincidence”, there is a sufficient range of vocabulary for precision and flexibility, for instance:
虽然词语选择偶尔出现错误——例如“when the children are at their ages”“high coincidence”，但文中使用了丰富的词汇，词汇的使用准确而灵活，例如：
- “… negative relationship with the socio-economic situation of the family.”
- “… parenting style and individual’s own efforts …”
- “… positive attitude towards harsh realities …”
- “… child’s capacity building.”
- “… poverty-stricken family …”
Grammatical Range & Accuracy
There are a variety of complex structures. A few grammatical errors persist but these do not hinder understanding.
- “… it is very vital and necessary for them to develop the positive attitude towards harsh realities as well as strategies to deal with problems under the proper guidance of parents.”
- “When the children encounter various problems, it is important for them to acquire appropriate knowledge and techniques to analyze the problems…”
Overall score: 7