There is an increasing amount of advertising directed at children which encourages them to buy goods such as toys and snacks. Many parents are worried that these advertisements may be harmful to children. However, some companies claim that their advertising provides children with useful information. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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Much more advertising is aimed at children today than ever before. This trend has caused debate between parents and the companies whose products are advertised. （文章开头直入主题，句子简洁，一目了然）
Many parents argue that advertisements mislead children about the benefits of the products and cause them to form negative habits. （注意主题句提取）This is true to some extent. A large proportion of advertisements aimed at children promote junk food and toys that contribute little to children’s physical and social development. As it is harder for children to resist the influence of advertising than for adults, many of them buy advertised junk food and toys, or ask their parents to buy these products for them. Children who are frequently exposed to advertising are therefore more likely to develop an unhealthy diet and spend too much time playing with toys.
By contrast, （注意段落之间衔接）some companies claims that the advertisements of their products provide children with access to a large amount of useful information. For example, some TV commercials are for educational toys that can develop children’s thinking abilities, language skills or artistic creativity. There are also advertisements that help to promote healthy lifestyles among children, such as TV commercials for sports products and outdoor activity products. They tend to feature famous athletes or natural scenery, and encourage children to lead a more active lifestyle.
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My own view is that snack and toy advertising that targets children should be regulated by the government, and more research on the long-term effects of advertising on the rates of children’s diet-related diseases, such as obesity and high blood pressure, should be conducted by scientists.
文章整体没有用大词难词，句式也没有很复杂，但是读起来特别流畅，没有任何语法错误，论证层层递进，举例得当，说服力强。这样的文章就是7.5分。
